Shmup Haiku

NoboruWataya · Post by **NoboruWataya** » Thu Jul 07, 2005 6:12 pm

Impossible as
It is to no miss Donpachi
Guwange is much harder.

I wish life had a
Second loop, though I'm not good
Enough to loop it.

I played this game. For
Hours and hours, but I never
Got the hang of it.

Three to get started (I'm assuming you pronounce Donpachi as Don-pach).

Post by **BulletMagnet** » Thu Jul 07, 2005 6:32 pm

Hmm...is it pronounced "gwanj," "goo-wahnj," or "goo-wahn-geh?"

Love the Tracer Bullet avatar, btw.

I'll toss in one or two just for the heck of it...

Where did my ship go?
Then again, where's the background?
Bullets cover all!

Battle Garegga
Is crueller than the people
At the DMV.

TGK · Post by **TGK** » Fri Jul 08, 2005 5:41 am

I'm trying to make
A haiku of shooter games
why I cannot rhyme?

it's been a long day
my eyes blurr, too slow to dodge
the pink spam above

alpha5099 · Post by **alpha5099** » Fri Jul 08, 2005 5:43 am

Those glowing bullets
Spell certain doom; remember,
You must shoot the core!

Tomtom · Post by **Tomtom** » Sat Jul 09, 2005 12:33 am

Writing haiku is easy, you just stop at the seventeenth sylla

Psikyo games own me
orange and yellow bullets fly
time to credit-feed.

Post by **Icarus** » Sat Jul 09, 2005 12:50 am

Aim for the top score,
Even if you lack the skill.
One can only try.

(A little bit hazy on my syllables, haven't written creatively for a while.)

pixelcorps · Post by **pixelcorps** » Sat Jul 09, 2005 1:15 am

BulletMagnet wrote:Hmm...is it pronounced "gwanj," "goo-wahnj," or "goo-wahn-geh?"

it's "goo wahn geh"

howmuchkeefe · Post by **howmuchkeefe** » Sun Jul 10, 2005 12:11 am

unfocus your eyes
look beyond the monitor
see only motion

8 1/2 · Post by **8 1/2** » Sun Jul 10, 2005 12:30 am

For Gamestop...

You fucking lame prick,
I won't reserve Madden now.
Not ever my friend.

For my girlfriend...

I love you baby,
and I'll be to bed soon, but,
it's the second loop!

Post by **Ghegs** » Sun Jul 10, 2005 7:53 am

I had this one as a sig for a while, but damned if I know if it's in the correct form.

Above me I see
Snowflakes floating down
Like bullets of pink

alpha5099 · Post by **alpha5099** » Sun Jul 10, 2005 4:42 pm

Konami shmups lend themselves well to poetry, I guess:

Vic Viper darts in,
Its lasers pierce, flesh gives way
And the blob is dead.

Michael, unstoppable;
a wayward dot, unnoticed,
Reduces him to spam.

A cycloptic brain,
Its arms flailing. In the eye,
a ripple laser.

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EDIT: new one:

Booming voice crying
Duh Duh Duh Duh Duh Don Pach
heralds bullet hell.

Blade · Post by **Blade** » Sun Jul 10, 2005 5:32 pm

I hope I did these right...

Crimson sky
Bullets Black, Lasers White
Polarity Changing

Syren Sounds
Warning call, Full Throttle
Butsutekkai

Laser Array
Utatsugumi, Toratsugumi
Stone Like

Post by **BulletMagnet** » Sun Jul 10, 2005 8:02 pm

Blade wrote:I hope I did these right...

Not quite: in a haiku the first line has five syllables, the second seven, and the third five. A few adjustments could probably fix the ones you've already listed though.

PsikyoPshumpPshooterP · Sun Jul 10, 2005 8:37 pm

bullets fly to me
i graciously graize them
I suck gems and rings

ode to progear

alpha5099 · Post by **alpha5099** » Thu Jul 14, 2005 6:52 am

BulletMagnet wrote:
Blade wrote:I hope I did these right...
Not quite: in a haiku the first line has five syllables, the second seven, and the third five. A few adjustments could probably fix the ones you've already listed though.

I read the Wikipedia entry on Haiku; apparently most modern poets don't bother with the 5-7-5 rule, as it doesn't really reflect the structure of Japanese haiku, and most feel it causes stilted English and arbitrary confines.

Post by **BulletMagnet** » Thu Jul 14, 2005 1:38 pm

Bah, Wikipedia.

But yeah, trying to do a "real" haiku in English is more or less impossible anyways, but I tend to like to stick with the syllables anyway, for a semi-respectable "gai-ku."

Blade · Post by **Blade** » Thu Jul 14, 2005 2:30 pm

Well, think of it as Shmup Beatnik Prose, then.

Sly Cherry Chunks · Post by **Sly Cherry Chunks** » Thu Jul 14, 2005 3:34 pm

Most of the best shmups
Could only really be found
On C64

alpha5099 · Post by **alpha5099** » Thu Jul 14, 2005 9:15 pm

BulletMagnet wrote:Bah, Wikipedia.

But yeah, trying to do a "real" haiku in English is more or less impossible anyways, but I tend to like to stick with the syllables anyway, for a semi-respectable "gai-ku."

Hehe, gai-ku, that's good. You just come up with that? Really what we're doing is writing scifi-ku.